Reports: Eng 100 College Writing II: Fall 2011

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Rhetorical situations

Features of your essays

"The company built approximately 85,000 cars during its history. There are less than 2,000 documented survivors."

Collecting as luxury consumption: Effects on individuals and households
Russell W. Belk

Abstract
Collecting is a common acquisitive and possessive behavior that is generally regarded by society as more valued and less selfish than other forms of luxury consumption. Based on depth interviews with 200 collectors, an assessment of collecting is offered considering its problems and benefits for the individual collector, the collector's household, and society. While extreme cases are found in which collecting is addictive and dysfunctional for the individual and his or her family, it is more commonly found to be a beneficial activity, at least for the collector. But interpersonally, collections are found to be perceived as non-human rivals for the affection of collectors in the household and to leave a cultural legacy of material artifacts that over-represent powerful social classes.

Collectors and Collecting: A Social Psychological Perspective
Authors: WILLIAM McINTOSH1; BRANDON SCHMEICHEL2
Source: Leisure Sciences, Volume 26, Number 1, Jan-Mar 2004 , pp. 85-97(13)

Abstract:
Collecting is a pervasive behavior in our culture, yet it has received little attention in the psychological literature. We examine eight aspects of the collecting process, drawing on existing ideas and research in social psychology as well as existing research on collectors and collecting to describe the motivations that underlie collecting behavior. We suggest that collectors are drawn to collecting as a means of bolstering the self by setting up goals that are tangible and attainable and provide the collector with concrete feedback of progress.

Jenna's hook:

As the first bite is taken, this handpicked, piece of heaven takes the mind on a journey. A remarking flavor strikes one’s taste buds, and the thoughts begin to unravel: “This simply is delicious chocolate”. Not only does a single morsel of this fine, homemade slice of paradise has an individual creating a remembrance, but also has one savor the taste. Now, where do you find a piece of candy such as this?

On the other hand…

As one opens a merchandised candy bar, possibly a Snickers or a Milky Way, a sensible aroma is created: milky chocolate, with a hint of caramel, hits the nose. This is a cheap treat for only one or two bucks. As a single bite is taken, a simple thought is created: “Wow, this was a convenient purchase”. Just as fast as one selects a candy bar off of the shelf and is out of the store, the first bite of the candy bar meets the last. Now, where do you find a piece of candy such as this?

Context:

How do they want to spend their life?

Who wouldn’t want to live in a Mansion with beautiful neoclassical designs that you can look at? As if you never needed a TV. Neoclassicism was an influential movement in painting and was also very popular since the 1760s. You would think it should be popular, since there are prints and pictures of neoclassicism on a few of the Mansions on Millionaire’s Row. Neoclassicism comes from the “European and American architecture style inspired by Classical Greek - and especially Roman- ruins.”

Conference 1

in 85 Humboldt (photo on right of the front). You enter from the back; it's the fourth house down the line after Public Safety. I'll be in the 1st floor meeting room, just inside the back door, or in my 2nd floor office.

Oral Presentations

Oral Presentation

Essay Evaluation

Copy and paste the list below into the email with your essay. Give each of the eight items a score from 4 through 0. Be prepared to justify that score.

- Introduction
- Body
- Conclusion
- Appropriateness of claims/arguments to support thesis
- Appropriateness of evidence
- Awareness of Audience
- Language & style
- Documentation

Here is an abbreviated version of the scoring system. For each of the item on the list above, give your essay a score from 4 through 0.

	4	1	0
Organization Introduction	Captures audience attention in a distinctive engaging way. Establishes clear & manageable thesis & purpose in an engaging way. Thesis is located effectively, to allow for smooth transition to the body of essay.	Attempts to capture audience attention. Attempts, but does not effectively establish, a focus and purpose. Thesis present, but may be misplaced.	Does not capture audience attention. Thesis & purpose not present.
Organization Body	Presents major points in clear, logical and coherent order. Transitions, located at the beginning of each body paragraph, clearly reflect the thesis & smoothly guide reader from topic to topic.	Attempts to present major points in logical and coherent order. Attempts to provide transitions.	Does not present major points in a logical order. Does not provide transitions.
Organization Conclusion	Briefly summarizes main points in an original and reflective way to give a sense of closure. Reinforces thesis & purpose in a topic specific & reflective way. Maintains audience attention in a distinctive way.	Attempts briefly to summarize main points. Attempts to reinforce thesis & purpose. Does not maintain audience attention	Conclusion not present. No sense of closure.
Mastery of Topic Appropriateness of claims/arguments to support thesis	Each claim/argument directly supports and/or relates to the thesis in an original way. Each claim/argument is original & valid. Each claim/argument is clearly & distinctively expressed.	Claims/arguments attempt to supports and/or relates to the thesis. Some claims/arguments are valid. Some claims/arguments are expressed.	Thesis-related claims and/or arguments are not present.
Mastery of Topic Appropriateness of evidence	Evidence clearly & directly supports claims/arguments in an original way. Evidence is persuasive, that is, sufficient, relevant, valid, reliable, credible	Evidence attempts to support claims/arguments. Some evidence is insufficient, irrelevant, invalid, unreliable, not credible.	There is no evidence, or evidence is not relevant to claims/arguments. Evidence is not sufficient, relevant, valid, reliable, credible. Part or all of the paper is plagiarized.
	4	1	0
Awareness of Audience	Displays awareness of audience demographics & attitudes in an original way. Recognizes audience needs. Meets those needs responsibly & distinctively.	Displays minimal awareness of audience demographics & attitudes & needs. Overlooks some aspect of meeting those needs.	Displays no awareness of audience demographics & attitudes and needs.
Language & style	Uses appropriate grammar & syntax, vocabulary, and mechanics.	Uses ineffective, inappropriate grammar & syntax, vocabulary, and mechanics	Grammar & syntax flawed to the level of incomprehension. Vocabulary inappropriate. Incorrect spelling, punctuation, and other mechanics.
Documentation	In the body of the essay, uses parenthetical documentation effectively, that is, smoothly and unobtrusively	Uses obscure, awkward, or intrusive documentation.	Applies no documentation style to the essay.

Evaluation Criteria

content

Is it logical, insightful, and visually interesting?
structure

Is it easy to follow and learn from?
language

Is it written, designed, and presented in an appropriate tone?
mechanics

Is it free of error and attractive to look at?

It comes down to this: If I were your boss, I would want to see paper and screen documents that are attractive and accessible. Having your work available when I need it affects the quality component of my assessment. The quality of your writing can be important at raise and promotion time.

These criteria are loaded with ambiguous and subjective terms: easy, appropriate, attractive, good, hard, flair, enthusiasm. Such holistic characterizations come from observations colored by assumptions and prejudices.

Content

insufficient, irrelevant, invalid, unreliable, incredible <----> sufficient, relevant, valid, reliable, credible

Structure

Language

Mechanics

intrusive (misspelling, inconsistent punctuation, diction etc.) <----> invisible

modified: October 2011
by Douglas Anderson
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name	title	topic (< 15-word description)	main reader (audience)	reader's need / purpose / interest	thesis statement	rhetorical mode	organizing principle	hook	context
Rosie	Deep into the paranormal	Roycroft and paranormal	into the paranormal but don't know about the haunted Roycroft Inn			process?
Jaimee scientist		Pub Sch 80 and factory model of education	parent	should child go to public school? What are the alternatives?		definition or process
Jenna scientist		Parkside Candies vs Wilson Farms				compare/contrast	terms of comparison: Atmosphere Work Ethic
Singh scientist		describing and characterizing Wmsville S	My friend who is coming here from India	decide whether to attend WS		comparison	terms of comparison? PEST?
T'Challa scientist	Downtown and its vacancies	downtown buffalo mainly shea's performing arts and the surrounding vacant buildings and also the small business that are remaining open due to shea's performing arts	Potential consumers to relocate downtown or people wanting to move to buffalo and want to know the truth.	decide whether to open a store downtown or whether to move to buffalo.		process
Kyren scientist		the value of vintage Pierce-Arrows for collectors	wealthy person at P-A car auction	how much to spend? are these cars worth it? as investment? as status symbol?		?	process?
Haeli scientist		hauntings at the Richardson complex	Someone who believes in the paranormal but doesn’t know much at all about the Richardson Complex and is interested in doing so.	should I try to break in and see for myself? How were these people tortured? � How did they die there if they did? � What happened when this became public knowledge? Was it dealt with of looked over?				"Oh goodie..... another old building that the state is wasting money restoring. The building is a tribute to the thousands of men and women who were tortured by doctors. Patients were subjected to shock treatments and all types of medical experiments. It is also a place where parents could send their "gay" sons and daughters to be "cured by torture"....... The richardson complex should be torn down."
Marquise scientist	The Mansions of Millionaires' Row	Millionaires' Row is a sort of linear paradise of many mansions set amidst tree-shaded lawns and elegant gardens most of the city's sixty millionaires lived in	architects	appreciating and decribing the different designs in the mansions; comparing the old designs to the modern desings why is the older designs better;To motivate, to give people the belief that they can become wealthy and live a luxury life		compare/contrast the different types of mansions
Jessica
Antonia
Sara
Jermaine scientist		conflicted between the government and how he don't want them to put subdizied taxes on the First Niagara Center because that would make the tickets double the price they already are.	Sports fan	conflict between self-interest and political philosophy Doesn't want them to tax the first niagara center because ticket prices would go up. Doesn't want subsidies to go to FNC because taxes would go up. Does want subsidies because ticket prices would go up.		process of resolving that conflict? definition of the whole situation?	process: time definition: force-field analysis (driving vs restraining forces)
Katie scientist	History of Music at Kleinhans Music Hall	the change in Musical performance and musical Genre at Kleinhans over the decades starting from when it opened in 1940	A tour guide who needs to know the history of music at Kleinhans how it has changed as well as the big performers there at the time	to perform her job well; employee training		process: The Change in Musical Genre and performance over the decades	Each paragraph will explain the various music acts that have performed at Kleinhans during that decade.

The Reports

Eng 100 - College Writing I - Fall 2011

Class Directory

Assignments

Rhetorical situations

Features of your essays

Conference 1

Oral Presentations

Oral Presentation

Essay Evaluation

Organization

Introduction

Organization

Body

Organization

Conclusion

Mastery of Topic

Appropriateness of claims/arguments to support thesis

Mastery of Topic

Appropriateness of evidence

Awareness of Audience

Language & style

Documentation

Evaluation Criteria

Content

Structure

Language

Mechanics